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Hjälp med Engelska språket

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Har sedan min förra text tagit till mig råden och försöker bättra mitt engelska språk. Har i alla fall skrivit ihop en ny text på engelska. Skulle vilja få den bedömd ur ett grammatiskt perspektiv, dess meningsuppbyggnad samt dess flöde.

Berättelsen i säg och dess handling är inte det viktiga för min del, utan det är självaste språket jag använder och hur det flyter på.

The computer!
Wherever you are in this big and beautiful world you will find this amazing box. A box created only 20 years ago, and which during its latest ten years has developed faster than you ever can imagine. A box that’s full of new technology and our modern way to interact with the world outside. Is it possible to replace is box with something else and still do the things we are doing in these modern days?
- To answer that question properly I would need some kind of expert help, unfortunately I don’t have access to that sort of help. But I will still do my best when answering the question. If we look around and tries to find something that in some sort of way even with a possibility small as an electron in the smallest ant spices around the world, if we could find that we would be close our goal. And if we do look around, I’m sorry do disappoint you there is nothing even close to the computer, yes we have during the latest five years developed new kinds of mobile phones like the Iphone, but we have to remember that the new phones’ technology is based on the computers’ and it have only been able to develop when the computers is a step ahead in the development. Cause after all the mobile phone companies is looking in the rear-view mirror to develop better products to satisfy their customers, their only way to make money.

I think it’s amazing what a computer can do, I mean you can do whatever you want, everything from chatting with friends on the other side of the globe, make your own movies, storage old photographs taken by your family 50 years ago, share whatever you like with people you don’t even know, use it in school to educate students, getting updated with fresh news, play games by yourself or with mates too use it to do something so simple as writing, just like I’m doing right now. The list goes on and on.

If we think outside the box and imagines the world without the computer, how would it look like?
- If you can imagine how it looked like during the Second World War I think you are close to the image of a world without the computer. During the Second World War they had powerful aircraft and they were able to connect through the radio, the technology was good and made its duty but not good enough to the standards we’re living with nowadays. And if that was the case, and we were living with the technology from back then it would be insane. It’s so hard and so on another level that can’t even imagine how it would be without the computer. Who would take care of the world economy? How would the bourse look like, would it even exist? What about my private economy, would there be any banks or would they be replaced by my mattress? Without a working financial economy not only in our respective country but also in the rest of the word it’s obvious that it’s not going to work and I’m glad to say that these days are different from the days back then.

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Floppsen:

Vad är texten till för= ska du skriva en bok?


Vill träna upp min engelska, så förutom att läsa engelska böcker väljer jag även att skriva lite. Lägger upp de här på UM så att andra kan bedöma och kritisera => så att jag blir bättre på språket.


aristoteles:

Texten kändes lite mysko. Den pendlade mellan fint upplagt och lågstadievibbar. Som om du kopierar vissa delar ur en text och skrivit vissa delar själv.


Allt är skrivet av mig, så inget är kopierat. Men vart får du dessa lågstadievibbar? kan säkert bero på att jag ibland tappat glöden och bara skrivit på utan ngn eftertanke.
maralg:

Allt är skrivet av mig, så inget är kopierat. Men vart får du dessa lågstadievibbar? kan säkert bero på att jag ibland tappat glöden och bara skrivit på utan ngn eftertanke.


maralg:

I think it’s amazing what a computer can do, I mean you can do whatever you want, everything from chatting with friends on the other side of the globe,


Den meningen kändes lite dåligt formulerad. Den stämmer väl men den känns inte riktigt som om den passar in.
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Använd ej hopdragningar i formella texter, ger ett oseriöst intryck.

Din engelska är verkligen inte urusel, men din meningsuppbyggnad känns inte riktigt genuin. Tänk på att inte bara översätta svenska meningar rakt av till engelska, utan försök få en känsla för hur det engelska språket fungerar.